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The monster showed up just after midnight
Creeping down the crying stairs
His insides churning with fright
The souls he took were only fair
There is no excuse for what they had done
Enslaved to the darkness
And chained to life
His scars will never heal
Give Time
Stay hidden
And the monster will only show just after midnight
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Poetry unit for English class
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Ohgodgeese Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Student Photographer
Ultimately I rather liked the poem although what you mean by crying stairs. I'm not entirely sure is their some sort of fluid running down the stairs? 
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lily101220 Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the feedback! (:
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